Making Readers Turn the Page

After judging writing contests for several years, I’ve
become convinced that bad writing isn’t the worst thing to happen to a
manuscript. Readers can get over bad writing. But a boring story is
unforgivable. Who will keep reading when she’s bored?  
Recently on the Books and Such Blog, Wendy Lawton said she’s seeing manuscripts that are submitted too early. They are “workmanlike”
manuscripts, according to one editor. Those are manuscripts that are “all
elbows,” Wendy says. Where “every technique seems to jut out.”
That made me stop and think.
I have always thought the workmanlike manuscript is the one that
carries the story like a sturdy wheelbarrow would. It gets ‘er done. It’s the
manuscript where every sentence is technically correct, but there’s nothing
pretty about the writing. Workmen aren’t dressed up.  
The opposite of workmanlike manuscripts would be pretty
manuscripts, I thought. But pretty writing doesn’t make a story great. Good
manuscripts aren’t full of flash and flair. Considering some of the contest
entries I’ve read, and considering my own writing journey, I wonder if what
Wendy means when she speaks of a manuscript where “every technique seems
to jut out” is one full of vibrant verbs and sentences with varying
structures, and nary a dialogue tag in sight. Such a manuscript has been worked
over and over until the sentences are pretty, maybe, but the first chapter doesn’t hold your interest, because the story is hidden under all the pretty sentences.
Pretty writing might give a writer a pleasant voice, and voice is important. I’ve thought for years that voice is the
most important factor in writing. I’ve nodded my head at agent and editor panels when the
speakers say that voice is what they care most about, because they can help you
fix your plot if it’s broken, but they can’t give a tone-deaf writer a great
I get that, and I still agree with it. But at some point the
story must be fixed. Either the writer or the editor has to make the story
work, because writing, whether it’s lyrical with luxurious, flowing sentences
or it’s using short fragments to showcase a snarky character, will not keep us
reading if there is no story.
What is it that pulls a reader through a book? I guess if
there was an easy answer to that, someone would write a book about it and get
I’d say what pulls me through the book is story, not great
technique. I’ll follow a character I care about anywhere even if there are
problems with the writing. But no matter how melodious her voice is, I won’t
sit in one spot with a character for long, while she waxes poetic on the
flowers in the meadow.
I want forward movement.
The character needs to love something or hate something or care
about gaining or losing something. And something needs to stand in the way of
his achieving his goal.
Does that mean we have to jump right into the action? Do I
care about a character I’ve never met, who is in a “to the death”
battle with another character I’ve never met? How can I know who to root for if
I’ve never met either character?
I’ve tumbled these questions around and around as I’ve read “how
to” books and as I’ve critiqued manuscripts and judged contests, and in
the end, I think that what makes me keep turning pages is…
Inner conflict.
The character does need to want something that he can’t
obtain, but wanting to live through a fight while someone is beating him up is
not going to do it. It’s when we see a character torn between equal but
incompatible desires that we really have tension.
At a conference a couple of years ago, Jamie Weiss Chilton put it like this: Your character has to choose between two good things. It’s
not enough to make her choose between the bad boy and the good boy. If only one
boy is a viable choice, there is no conflict. But when a character has to
choose between two really good things, then we have the inner conflict that
makes the story compelling.
Think of the Green Goblin in the first Spiderman movie,
giving Peter Parker a terrible choice: Save Mary Jane or save a bunch of people
on a bus. Think of Katniss who doesn’t want to fight in the Hunger Games, but
who doesn’t want her sister to fight either. Or think of Anne Shirley whose inner
conflict is more subtle. She wants desperately to be adopted by Matthew and
Marilla, but she also wants to walk around with her head in the clouds, because
she’s an artistic soul and she can’t squelch that part of herself.
What about your WIP? Is your character faced with an inner conflict
in the first chapter? Tell me what that conflict is. If you don’t have one, can
you give your character an inner conflict?

 is the local liaison for SCBWI in Cobb County, Georgia. She has published short works in a number of places and has received an SCBWI Work in Progress grant. She can usually be found blogging about young adult novels at